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A nameless creature jammed into a nameless space located in an unknowable location was all that stood between Experiment 726 and what he considered to be the Endless Stream of Creation itself. The creature was large and menacing, but seemingly beautiful to behold. Experiment 726 crinkled his eyelids at the creature that stood before him, frustratingly unable to comprehend all but the most simple adjectives about it. And yet… it was as clear as day and cold as night.

Cold. That was something you could call it, 726 mused. It was one of a very limited number of describing words that he could muster about this impossible place, because no matter how much he looked or analysed anything, nothing seemed to make much sense.

“Why come here?” The nameless creature demanded. “And how? No creature such as yourself should even be capable of getting here.”

“I'm just lucky?” 726 tried. “I honestly don’t know.”

“You don’t know?” The entity echoed.

“Nope.” Said 726. “I'm just an experimental subject… you know the deal, born in a vat, raised in an enclosure… no one told me anything about what was to become of me. You do know that deal, right?”

The creature stared pensively for a moment – that was another useful describing word! – and sighed in 726’s general direction. “The first time your race is able to make any sort of contact, and they go and send a confused moron with no real life experience like you? How sad.”

I'm not a moron!” 726 called indignantly. “I’m educated, thank-you very much! My mentors have said I’m obscenely smart, that I’ve learnt so much in so little time! That’s why they wanted me for the experiment.”

“Obviously your mentors neither taught nor knew the difference between genuine cleverness and education.”

“Well, why do you think I’m an idiot, then? Give me reasons.”

The nameless creature snorted. “You think of me as nameless, yet you do not ask my name. You think this location to be unknowable, yet you make no real attempt to know it. You call what is behind me the 'Endless Stream of Creation', with no evidence but petty visuals. Most laughably of all, you do not fear me as you do your masters, and yet you still neglect to ask questions. Your shocking lack of curiosity is, above all else, the reason for your stupidity.”

“Oh.” Said 726. The creature began to laugh with unmistakeable mirth.

“Even now, you all but fail to ask me if I really can read your thoughts and mind.”

“But I don’t think you can.” Said 726. “I think you know things somehow, but if you could read my mind, you wouldn’t have seen the need to ask why and how I got here, would you?”

“Well… maybe you’re a little sharper than I thought.” The entity admitted. “Nevertheless, you’re wrong. I know exactly what’s going on in your head, but only what you’re thinking about at the time. And you weren’t thinking much about how you’d gotten here when you did. That’s why it always pays to ask and be sure, rather than walk around thinking you’re right and high and mighty when there might be something you’ve neglected to consider. Humans are fallible creatures, at best.”

726 looked at the maybe-not-so-indescribable creature oddly. “I bet you’re not infallible either. What makes you more right than I am?”

“Intuition.” Waved the entity, vaguely. “Regardless, there is a more pressing matter. For how long do your masters plan to keep you here?”

“Anyone would think you want me gone.”

“Oh, so you don’t know.” Said the entity, not even bothering to listen to 726’s words when what bubbled to the top of his mind provided a far more relevant answer. “And I am not lacking in social skills so much as to genuinely confuse you on that matter! I said nothing of wanting you gone.”

726 blinked. “When was the last time you even spoke to anything?”

“What?”

“You sound like you learnt how to interact with people out of a book.”

“I read no such thing!”

“Well obviously,” 726 chortled, “No serious manual would ever tell you to interact with someone by deriding them.”

Seriously confused, the entity tilted what appeared to be some sort of head, trying to make sense of this strange person who was accusing it of having no social skills. 726 was just staring at it smugly, doing his absolute best to keep his mind nearly completely blank, with the exception of a pure and continuous flow of random numbers…

“Confound it!” the entity exclaimed. “I – I’ve never actually spoken to anything in my life!”

The words echoed through the empty, infinite place, bouncing off nothing. 726 tilted his own head at the entity’s tilted head, then wandered around it to the still-mentally-dubbed Endless Stream of Creation. It seemed to show everything that 726 had known to happen, but what he could remember was infinitesimally small compared to everything else that flowed down the stream. All the while, little sparkling droplets of what was apparently time spattered and flew from the body of energy, before being sucked back in at some other point.

“… You can see all of this, but I’m the only thing you’ve ever met?”

“Well, no one else has ever gotten here.” The entity explained. “I didn’t even think it was possible… until you showed up.”

“… All your life? How long have you lived?”

And then 726 had popped out of existence, just as fast as he'd originally appeared. The entity stopped just as it was about to speak, looked around almost desperately for any sign of company, then sat down. It tilted its head the other way, and shut its eyes.

“… I’ve always lived.” It sighed.

A drabble written in the (very) small hours. This version is heavily edited, to say the least. :giggle:

Am not sure where I was going with this, but I was feeling pretty lonely at the time. I guess that's what sparked it.
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Given 2013-04-21
Nameless by =Pseudinymous Suggester Writes: An acute examination of loneliness in the vast universe. ( Suggested by doodlerTM and Featured by BeccaJS )
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GoneBatty385 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013
I like this. The vague details of 726's life and situation make this story feel like part of a larger thing. However, the ending--when we realize that the entity is actually the focus of the story rather than 726--is particularly well-suited to the short story.
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SharpPhotoStudio Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Professional Photographer
Well I really enjoyed reading it, and if there were a longer version, I would definitely enjoy reading that as well. Thank you for the enjoyable read.
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BatmanWithBunnyEars Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013   General Artist
The bizarre characters and otherworldly environment make me think of an abstract painting portrayed with words. The stark, abrupt end to the banter vividly underscored the sense of loneliness in the ending.
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jade-pandora Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
:clap: From one writer to another, it just goes to show that it's better to write what you have inside wanting to get out even if it doesn't give you a clue as to where you're going.
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icecream234 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
show how important a name is
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz: :iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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the-shiny-victini Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
Wow, this is amazing!!! :D
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SimplySilent Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
:heart: Congrats on the DD! :clap:
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Ash2K13 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Filmographer
wow its good XD
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BleedingShadows94 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very well written. Intriguing and sad. I actually felt like I was in a void with something faceless (though in my mind, it kept kind of warping into a dragon, perhaps because of the voice I gave it?).

I actually like your writing style a lot, and I think I will save this for future reference, not to mention future reflection and enjoyment. :dalove:

~Tobi
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the well deserved DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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Strudel--Cutie4427 Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013   Writer
... I feel bad for Entity (That's it's name now) ... I want to give it a huggle!
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Sir-Herp Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Student General Artist
Was just watching DBZ Abridged and contemplating how much I like Goku and Frieza's voices, and ended up reading this in their voices, Goku's voice being 726's. Rather interesting, haha.

The story started off a bit confusing and ended abruptly, but I suppose that's part of reading a short story. I kind of wish this story was longer, though! It was a great story. I can't even describe how much I like it; my vocabulary fails me right now. But just... :iconclapplz:
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vanmall Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congrats on the Daily Deviation! :happybounce:
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Dibs-New-Beginnings Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Student Writer
Whoa. I really like that ending.
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GravureArtist Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
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non0sequiter Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
Very nice! I love the open ending. You did a remarkable job conveying the setting and story line without making anything too explanatory; I felt as if there was much more going on behind the scene, and the reader could only catch glimpses of it (or possibly that was me just projecting my own assumptions, but either way the effect was quite nice). I agree, the overall style reminded me a bit of Asimov, and the content of Lovecraft, both of whom happen to be two of my favorite sf authors.
Congrats on the well-deserved DD!
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Yuuza Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013  Professional Digital Artist
i loved it! it's very creative and original :love:
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looking-glass-pear Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
After I finished reading this, and then your comment, and then the suggesters comment, I just sat back and sighed. That was beautiful!

Not so much for the interesting characters, the ideas or how well written it was. But mostly because of how all those things combined left such an impression (the kind of impression that you know will follow you for a long long time.) The feeling I'm left with is the infinite loneliness I feel when I look at stars or passing aeroplanes. And that isn't an easy feeling to capture in a few hundred words!
:iconclappingplz: I applaud you!
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Rutenator Featured By Owner Apr 21, 2013
You have truly impressive writing skills for a person of your age. In fact, I think you surpass many published SF authors. This text is a manifestation of the magic of good storytelling that escapes analysis methinks.

After reading this twice and faving, i'd like to be able to understand the story some day :D
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VeggieB0i Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013
How totally awesome!

Reminds me a lot of Isaac Asimov, with a touch of Lovecraft and Kafka. Not accusing you in any way of being unoriginal, of course. I mean to say that this piece is as original, farfetched, and surprising as some of my favorites. Congrats on the well-earned DLD!
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Pseudinymous Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Ahahah, thanks! Actually I'm kind of honoured, I've never read Asimov but I know a bit about him and the sorts of things he writes. Definitely have to read his stuff one day. :nod:

But yeah, I'm so happy~! :dance:
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BadNarrator Featured By Owner Apr 1, 2013  Professional Writer
editing is good. that's what most of the writing process is, polishing stones into jems.
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leyghan Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I like this odd little meeting between beings. I enjoyed their back and forth and felt sad for Nameless at the end. :+fav:
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DLD (Daily Literature Deviations) in a news article that can be found here [link]
Be sure to check out the other artists featured and show your support by :+fav:ing the News Article.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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icecheetah Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013
They slowly switch places inteligence-wise... at least that's what I think.
I find myself pretty befaffled though.
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Pseudinymous Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Something like that. It was a very odd train of thought and I'm still not really sure what I had in mind.

xD... Great?
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icecheetah Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013
Ok.

Whether or not it's great is mostly dependant on you I think
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